Subject: big shows debut promo Sun Dec 23, 2012 1:23 pm
Big show's titantron hits:
*Big Show enters the ring and the some of the crowd are cheering and the rest are booing*
Big show: I don't know how you dare boo me!
*Now the all the crowd boo and start chanting 'what'*
Show: You all chant what like i care ha, well you have got a lot to learn you hypercritical jerks! But your not why i'm out here the reason i'm out here is make a statement make an impact in OCW, and i'm going to do that in the most destructive way i can, i'm not that sure who to target yet but all i can say is ALL the champions better watch out because i'm coming for all of you and i will win the ocw championship without a doubt and none of you can stop me know one in the locker room can stop me and anyone who trys and stop me i will just knock you out.
and i know someon will try and stop me and they will just find them waking up surrounded by paramedics and when he asks them what happened they will tell them, you've just been knocked out by the big show, anyone who even gives me a dirty look will felll the pain of the W.M.D!!
*Big show walks back up the ramp, turns round and does his knock out taunt*
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Subject: Re: big shows debut promo Sun Dec 23, 2012 6:43 pm
(+1 for your Debut. +2 for a pretty good attempt at a first promo. I saw some grammatical errors that could be easily fixed. In order to help out with things like that, try running them through a word document. I enjoy the use of pictures in promos so good job with that. I think once you have something to talk about you will be able to write much higher quality promos. Try to use a bit more description in this as well to break up the dialogue and the crowd's response to Big Show. Besides that though, I quite enjoyed it and was very excited to see someone sign up as Big Show. I think you can make quite an impact here. Welcome aboard. Keep up the good work and just work on what I pointed out.)
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